Update: The Sorceress and her Lovers

The Sorceress and her LoversToday I’ve been working on both chapter six and seven of The Sorceress and her Lovers.  I thought I would give you an idea of what’s going on.  I might accidentally drop a spoiler, so be forewarned.  On the other hand, if you don’t know the previous books, you probably can’t figure out what I’m talking about at all.

Chapter One: Bangdorf– This is a Senta chapter, as she and Baxter visit the capital of Freedonia.  As one might expect, given the events in The Two Dragons, she’s not very popular there.

Chapter Two: The God of the Sky– This chapter follows lizzie chief Hsrandtuss as he visits Bessemer the Steel Dragon.  We see the return of some lizzies from previous books, like Kendra the hunting guide, and we meet many more new lizzies.

Chapter Three: Iolana– Brings us back to the Dechantagne Staff home and we meet quite a few familiar faces, Radley Staff, Iolanthe, Yuah, Honor Hertling, the McCoort boys, and others.  We also meet Esther the lizzie.

Chapter Four: The Bomb– This chapter brings us back to Port Dechantagne for the first time in this book.  Saba Colbshallow and Eamon Shrubb are both here as are their growing families.  We get to meet Dee Dee Colbshallow.  Oh yeah, there’s also a bomb.

Chapter Five: Peter– Senta and Baxter are back in Brech City, where they (and we) are reunited with a couple of magic users of previous acquaintance.

Chapter Six is when things start getting hairy for Hsrandtuss, who must lead a group of warriors into the dungeon beneath an ancient fortress to hunt down a horrible beast.

Chapter Seven is just as tough (though not as life-threatening) for Iolana as she has to negotiate life as an eleven-year-old and come to grips with some unsettling information about her family’s past and her own.

As you might have noticed, there are no titles yet for chapters six and seven.  They are the last things I decide on.

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Cissy

The Dark and Forbidding LandWhen I wrote The Drache Girl and The Two Dragons, Cissy the lizzie had a small but important part.  So when I went back and wrote The Dark and Forbidding Land as a prequel, I couldn’t resist the chance to write a big part for her from her point of view.  I did the same with Brechalon and The Young Sorceress.

Here Yuah and Cissy have a confrontation with each other after the woman finds out that the lizzie has been learning to read.

The woman led the way around the side of the house and through the still dead-looking garden.  At the far side of the backyard was a gate which opened into an alleyway that made up the middle of the block between the Dechantagne house and the empty lots behind it that would someday host large stately homes.  Turning right, Yuah walked through the alleyway.  It was not covered with gravel as were the surrounding streets, but was mostly covered with dead grass and a few patches of dirty snow, with a meandering footpath roughly in the middle.  At the end of the block, she turned west down Acorn Street.  Glancing quickly behind her, she saw that Cissy was following at a distance of three paces.  She stopped and pointed to a spot on the ground just to her left.  The reptilian quickly moved to the spot by her side.

“You will stay close by me to help discourage velociraptors.”

“Yes.”

Yuah took a step and then another, but did not return to the quick stride she had been taking earlier.  She lazily strolled from step to step.  From the corner of her eye, she could see Cissy’s great greenish bulk beside her.

“So,” she said slowly, and then burst out.  “Who has been teaching you to read?”

“Hy you hant to know?”

“Don’t you sass me!”  Yuah turned quickly to look into the round yellow eyes.  “You are my servant.  You live in my house.  Answer me, damn it!”

“He say not tell,” said the lizzie, very quietly.

Yuah just stared into the yellow eyes.

“Your Terrence.”

Yuah stared, her mouth falling open again.

“You liar,” she said quietly.  “How dare you lie right to my face like that?”

“Cissy not lie.  Terrence teach to read.  He say not tell.”

“Why would he do that?  He hates you lot.  He hates all of you.”

Cissy shrugged.  “Cissy look at…”  She made an opening book hand gesture.  “Cissy try to read.  Terrence find her.  He give testasstilas chogghua tostisthiss…”

“Stop, stop.  I don’t understand.  I know a few lizzie words, but… testarosa?”

“Testasstilas… He… teach.”

“Why?”

Cissy shrugged again.

“Why teach a lizzie who can’t even say ‘book.’  You can’t say ‘book’ can you?”

“Took.”

“You see?”

“I say ‘took,” said the lizzie, suddenly straitening up.  “I say took.  I read took.  I read Holy Scritures.”

Cissy seemed to have grown twice her original size and Yuah shrank back, glancing down at the long claws on each hand.  The reptilian followed her gaze and then returned it back to the woman’s eyes.  She leaned backwards away from Yuah, but didn’t return to her hunkered down smallness.

“I do not know why Terrence teach reading,” Cissy said, carefully enunciating each word.  “Terrence haff own reason.  He not do anyone say.  He do he say.  No else.”

“Yes, well that is certainly true.  He does what he wants and to the devil with what anyone thinks.  He always did, even before his mother died.  But still, I can’t imagine…  He didn’t give you the scriptures to study, did he?  I think he’s secretly an atheist, though he denies it.”

“No.  I see ladies reading Scritchers.  I read.”

“Surely you can’t find any real interest in them.  They are stories of people and places long ago in the human world.  What are they to you?”

“It is the whord of God.”

“Yes, but not your God—not the lizzie’s God.”

“I think hoonan God is God,” said Cissy.  “Lizzie gods not create lizzies.  How hoonans here?  How lizzies here?  How trees here?  How anything here?”

Yuah stood thinking for just a moment.

“I’m not saying you’re wrong,” she said at last.  “I don’t know enough to say one way or another.  I wish we had an Imam that we could go ask, or even a Kafirite Priest for that matter.”

“I not see you read Scritchers.  I see you read other tooks.”

“I should be reading them.  Maybe that’s why I’m not… maybe that’s why some things aren’t turning out the way that I want them to.  I read them a great deal when I was young.  I had to.  I had to be able to recite the names of the Scriptures by rote.”

Cissy tilted her head to one side, clearly unable to follow all the words the woman was saying.

“I had to learn them,” said Yuah.

“You know all Scritchers?”

“Oh yes, I can name them all.  Listen carefully.” She took a deep breath, and in very quick succession she listed. “Creation, Odyssey, Discovery, Old Prophets, Stars, Laws, Kings, Writings of Nom, Letter of Nom, Middle Prophets…”  She stopped.  “See?  And that’s only the beginning.  You know I can name the Kafirite part of the scriptures too.  Master Akalos made sure I could recite them.  He was our tutor.  Well, he was the Dechantagne tutor really.”

“More Scritchers?”

“Yes, well you see, the ones I just listed are the first part of the Grand Scriptures.  They along with the Magnificent Law make up the Zaeri Holy Book.  The Kafirites have thrown out the Magnificent Law, but they have another whole set of scriptures that they call the Modest Scriptures.  So their book has the Grand Scriptures and these Modest Scriptures, which if you ask me have very little modesty in them.”

“You teach Cissy Scritchers?” asked the lizzie.

“No.  I don’t think so,” replied Yuah, shaking her head.  “I am not Terrence.  I most assuredly do care what other people think of me—I suppose I shouldn’t, now that I’m a Dechantagne, but I do.  And teaching a lizzie?  I just don’t know what people would make of that.”

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Herbert Parnorsham

The Dark and Forbidding LandMr. Parnorsham is one of those characters who is around a lot in Senta and the Steel Dragon.  He is proprietor of the pfennig store and as such can play an important role in the town and in the story– providing information to the characters and the reader, and his store is a great spot for different characters to meet and interact.

I based Mr. Parnorsham’s name on Mr. Haversham of Little Lord Fauntleroy.  Although the two characters have little in common, I liked the sounds and wanted that British feel.  Here Mr. Parnorsham shows off his pistol to Yuah and Terrence– a pistol that he gets to use in book 3, The Drache Girl.

They stood quietly while Mr. Parnorsham finished trading with all the lizzies in the store, though just as he returned to them, the bell above the door rang and another group entered.

“So what may I do you for today, lady and gentleman?”

“I would like two number four needles and a one spool of thread each of azure, beryl, cerulean, cobalt, and ultramarine.”

Mr. Parnorsham pulled a small envelope from below the counter.

“The needles come three to a package now, but it’s the same price that we used to charge for two.”  He walked to the notions counter and returned a moment later, setting the thread next to the package of needles.  “Here you go—five spools of blue thread.”

Yuah squinted her eyes and examined the thread, sure that Mr. Parnorsham was either trying to cheat her or make fun of her, but the thread was all of the correct shades.

“Anything else?”

“Not for me, but I’m sure that Mr. Dechantagne is in need of a few things.”

“Captain?”

“I need a tin of shaving powder, whatever kind you think best, and a bottle of Brill-Hair.”

“Very good, sir.”  Mr. Parnorsham returned with the items.  “Anything else?”

“I also want two jars of Major Frisbie’s green tomato chutney.”

Mr. Parnorsham paused.  “Are you sure?”

“Why wouldn’t I be?”

“Well, it’s just that your sister doesn’t purchase it.  I understand that Mrs. Colbshallow is the official condimentarian, if you will.”

“My sister isn’t here to purchase it.  I am.”

“Of course, sir.  No disrespect implied.”  Mr. Parnorsham retrieved two jars of the chutney from a small stack just inside his large front windowpane.  “That will be twenty five p for the lady and let’s see… two marks seventy.”

“That’s roadside robbery,” said Terrence, sounding disgusted.

“Now that hurts, Captain.”  And Yuah noted that Mr. Parnorsham did indeed look as though his feelings were hurt.  “You know the cost of shipping products all the way from Brechalon.  If anyone knows, you should.”

“Yes, he knows,” said Yuah.  “Don’t mind him.  He’s just in a mood because of all the lizzies here and at his home.”

“Mmm.  Oh!”  Recognition suddenly rolled across the shopkeeper’s face.  “Well, yes I see… of course.  You know, I could do without their scaly faces myself.  I keep thinking they’re going to open up those great mouths and bite me, like Mrs. Gompers.”

“I have just the thing for you,” said Yuah, and reaching into Terrence’s pocket, she pulled out the large nickel-plated revolver and made as if to hand it to Mr. Parnorsham.

“Hey,” said Terrence.  “That’s a family heirloom.”

“Oh, pish posh.  You bought that in Brech before we set sail on the Minotaur.  And you’ve got at least two more just like it.”

“Oh, that’s a fine weapon,” said Mr. Parnorsham, making no move to take it.  “Too much gun for me though.”

He reached under the counter and pulled out a small black pistol.  He pressed a button on the side and a clip full of bullets dropped from the handle.  After pulling back the action to empty the chamber, he held out the weapon for Terrence.

“What do you think of that, Captain?”

Terrence held out his hand and the shopkeeper placed the pistol in it.  He ran his fingers over the smooth lines and sharp edges of the black steel.

“Automatic?  Never cared for them myself.  What is it—a Tycho Mather C-21?”

“Mather 17,” said Mr. Parnorsham proudly.  “Freedonian naval officer’s sidearm.”

“7.65 millimeter?”

“That’s right.”

“How do you get ammunition for it?”

“I have two boxes.  More than enough for me.  I shot off six rounds to try it out and a dozen more when the lizzies attacked.  The rest I’m saving for robbers.”

Terrence handed back the pistol, and then reached out to find his own still in Yuah’s hand.  He took it and put it back into the pocket of his greatcoat.  He took Yuah’s arm and gently pulled in the direction of the front door.  She quickly grabbed their packages from the counter.

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Yadira Colbshallow

The Dark and Forbidding LandMrs. Colbshallow (Saba’s Mother) is present in all the Senta and the Steel Dragon books.  She adds a lot of flavor to the stories.  I had written The Voyage of the Minotaur, in which she appears quite a bit and had never given her a name.  In the first draft, she was just referred to as “cook”.  I made her Saba’s mother.  He appeared throughout the book, but wasn’t too important– at least in that draft.  I was several chapters into The Drache Girl before I gave her a first name, and that only for a gag about the name of Eamon’s upcoming child.  It was revealed that both Eamon’s wife Dot and Saba had mothers who first names were Yadira.

When I went back to write The Dark and Forbidding Land between those two books, Yadira Colbshallow got a much meatier part than she had previously enjoyed in the series. It was a lot of fun rounding out her personality.  Here she is, hiring lizzies to be Dechantagne servants.

Now another softskin was talking to the one that Tisson had pointed out as Clark.  Both were looking in the direction of Cissy and the others.

“What is it?” asked Cissy.

“She is a female,” said Tisson, standing up.  “The females have very wide bottoms.  And you can see she is older because the tuft of hair on her head is grey.”

“You know much, old one,” said Sirrek, sounding impressed.

“I have come to the human village many times over the last two years, to trade and to work.  In Tserich they will no longer let me hunt, because I am getting too old, but the humans will let me work and earn many copper bits.”

The older human female approached the group.  She was tiny even next to Cissy who was the smallest of the four, but she walked right up to them without fear.  Sirrek and Kheesie stood.  The human woman took each of the four by the shoulder and turned them around to look at their skin, their tails, and their feet.  She reached up and examined Tisson’s dewlap.

“I do believe Sergeant Clark is correct,” she said.  “You are a promising looking lot.  What are your names?”

Tisson put his hand, palm out over his dewlap.

“I Tisson,” he said, then pointed to each of the others in turn.  “This Sirrek, Kheesie, Cissy.”

“Wonderful!” shouted the human, clapping her hands together.  “My yes, you are a fine fellow.  Excellent.  You will all come along with me.”  She waved for them to follow and then started across the base towards the great wall.  “My name is Mrs. Colbshallow, though I don’t imagine you’ll be able to pronounce it.  You can say ‘Lady’, yes?”

“Lady.”  Each of the four lizzies tried out the word.

They reached the edge of the base when they were suddenly waylaid by a soldier with one of the big weapons slung over his shoulder.  The four lizzies instinctively shrunk back and tried to look small.

“Did you get a good selection, Mother?” the soldier asked Mrs. Colbshallow.

“Yes, yes.  No need to worry about that.  I’ve been hiring servants for nearly forty years now.  I know how to spot a good one, be he man or beast.”  She turned to the four lizardmen.  “This is my son, Saba.”

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Hero Hertling

The Dark and Forbidding LandSenta’s best friend Hero Hertling is always a fun character to work with.  She is in many ways the opposite of Senta and so it is fun to play them off against each other.  Hero is shy and quiet, kind and empathetic.  She doesn’t play a monumental role in the plot of this book, but we spend enough time to get to know her.

At that moment one of the two doors in the back of the room opened and Hero stepped out.  Seeing Senta, she squealed and bounced happily into her arms.

“What are you doing here?” she demanded.

“Hertzal brought me for tea.”

“Thank goodness.  I wanted to go to your house and visit, but Honor wouldn’t let me out.”

“She has the sniffles and she thinks nothing of spreading the germs around to everyone else in the town,” said her sister.

“Come sit down with me,” said Hero.  “I want to show you my new book.”

“Oh, great—a book,” said Senta facetiously as her friend produced a small volume with a brown leather cover.

“Don’t be like that.  It’s Colonel Mormont’s journal.”

“Who is Colonel Mormont?” asked Senta.

“He explored all across Mallon more than ten years ago.  He wrote all about velociraptors and iguanodons and loads of other animals.  He wrote about the lizzies too.”

“The only soldier I care about is Major Frisbee,” said Senta.  “He makes damn fine chutney.”

“We don’t use that word in this house,” said Honor.

“Chutney?”

“The d-word.”

“Oh.  Sorry.”

“You care about Saba Colbshallow, don’t you?” asked Hero slyly.

“Saba is very nice,” said Senta, “but you know my heart belongs to only one boy.”

“Anyway,” continued Hero.  “Colonel Mormont has a lot to say about the tyrannosauruses.  When he encountered them, they hunted in packs, running around and gobbling up everything in their paths.  They sound truly horrifying.”

“The one that we have is scary enough,” said Honor.

“Down on the plains by Sussthek, I saw a pack of them,” said Senta.  “They were following a herd of these really great long-necked dinosaurs.  They hardly even noticed us.”

“That sounds just like what the Colonel was talking about.  Listen to this… ‘the tyrannosaurus is the larger and more frightening relative of the coastal gorgosaurus of western Mallon.  Notable for its hideously red face atop a black body, the creature hunts in packs that scour the land…” 

Hero kept reading on, but Senta’s mind had wandered back to her encounter with Streck.  She didn’t know why it should bother her that he didn’t believe she could do magic, but it did.  He was just so smug—so Freedonian.  She began to think about how much fun it would be to annoy him, and as Hero continued reading, she decided that the rest of her winter might not be so boring if she made it her hobby to do so.

“Tea is ready,” said Honor, calling everyone to the table.

Honor, with Hertzal quietly helping her, had laid out a very nice tea.  A plate of sliced, smoked sausages sat next to a matching plate filled with boiled potatoes.  A small bowl of mustard sat across from a mismatched bowl of chutney—home made, not Major Frisbee’s.  And each of the four diners had a plate with two small grilled cheese and apple sandwiches and a bowl of winter squash soup.

“This is really ace,” said Senta, tucking in to her soup.  “Is this Freedonian food?”

“Well, we are from Freedonia,” said Honor, “so I guess this would qualify as Freedonian food.”

“Maybe that Streck knows what he’s talking about… at least as far as food is concerned.”

“Who’s Streck?” asked Hero.

“Is that Professor Calliere’s Freedonian solicitor?” asked Honor.

“I guess so,” said Senta.  “He’s a wanker.”

Hertzal made an up and down motion with his hand and Honor reached over and slapped him on the wrist.  “We don’t say that word either.”

“Sorry.  I should have said ‘tosser’.”

“Or that word!  Meine Güte, that entire topic is verboten am tisch.”

“Sorry.  What does ‘am tisch’ mean?”

“At the table,” said Hero.

“Oh.”  Senta took a bite of her sandwich.

 “I can see how you might not like Mr. Streck,” said Honor carefully after composing herself.  “He’s one of those Nationalistische Demokraten.  They are the ones who blame the Zaeri for everything they think is wrong with Freedonia.”

“Yeah, he thinks he’s a wizard too,” said Senta.

“He’s a wizard?”

“He thinks he is.”

“That is troubling,” said Honor.  “The Freedonian wizards, the ones that belong to the Reine Zauberei, they are the worst.  If he is really one of them, and he is here in Birmisia, then that is bad.  I hope someone is keeping an eye on him.”

“I’m sure that somebody will,” said Senta.  She was thinking of herself, but as she would find out later, she wasn’t the only one planning to keep tabs on Mr. Streck.

“I wonder what the new Mrs. Dechantagne thinks of him,” said Hero.

“That’s right,” replied Senta.  “She’s a Zaeri, isn’t she?”

Honor made a noncommittal noise.

After tea, Senta made her goodbyes to the Hertling family.  Honor wanted her to stay until she could get one or more of the neighborhood men to walk her home, but Senta wouldn’t hear of it.  Hertzal made signs indicating that he would walk her home himself, but she waved him off as well.

“Don’t worry about me.  I can take care of myself.  And no offense, but if anything comes along that I can’t handle, I doubt that any of your neighbors could.”

“You’re probably right,” said Honor, sounding unconvinced.  “But do be careful.”

“I’ll come by tomorrow and see you, Hero,” said Senta, donning her snowshoes.  “You can read me more about Colonel Marmalade.”

“Colonel Mormont,” corrected Hero.

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Yuah and Zeah

The Dark and Forbidding LandYuah Korlann moves from a background character in The Voyage of the Minotuar (although an important one) to one of the main characters in The Dark and Forbidding Land, while her father Zeah moves in the opposite direction.  Zeah’s main story arc was basically told in book 1 of the series, while Yuah’s stretches across all five books.  This is one of the rare portions of book 2 in which they both appear, as Terrence suddenly proposes marriage to her.

“Do you still want to marry me?” he asked.

“I don’t recall ever saying that I wanted to marry you in the first place.”

“You said that you loved me.”

“That’s not really the same thing, now is it?”

“Don’t you want to marry someone you love?” he asked.

“I want to marry someone who loves me,” she replied.

“We could have your father do it right now.  He’s the mayor.”

“Why do you suddenly want to get married?” asked Yuah.  “You’ve never shown two figs of interest in marrying me, or anyone else come to that.”

“I’m a blind man.  There’s not a lot I can do…”

“You are going to get your sight back.  It’s just a matter of time until we have the curse lifted.”

“Maybe.  Maybe not.  In any case, I can still provide for a family.  I’m on my way to being disgustingly rich.  You could be rich with me.  And if you have six or eight children, you might even plump up enough.”

“What about religion?”

“I don’t care about that.”

“How would we raise the children… I mean, if there were any?”

“However you want.  I leave that entirely up to you.”

She looked at him with one eyebrow cocked.

“I can’t appreciate the look you’re giving me,” he said.  “I’m blind.”

“You still haven’t said that you love me.”

“Is that a deal breaker?”

“Yes,” Yuah said, rather forcefully.  “It most certainly is.”

“I love you then,” said Terrence.

“Oh, this is stupid!” she shouted, pulling her arm from his grasp.  “You’re playing some game with the poor little Zaeri maid.”

“I’m not.”

“We’ll see,” she said, taking him by the arm and opening the door.

She pulled him into the small room inside and past her father’s pinch-faced secretary, despite the beginnings of protestations coming from the woman’s surprised face.  She opened the door to the office beyond and found her father sitting at his desk, surveying a series of papers laid out side by side.  He looked up, his face shifting from one of surprise to one of pleasure.

“Yuah, how lovely…”

“Papa, we want you to marry us,” Yuah interrupted.

“Muh, muh, muh…”

“Right now.”

Zeah Korlann stood up from behind his desk.

“Absolutely not,” he said.

“What?  Why not?” Yuah demanded.

“Um, well… I was hoping to make a better match for you.”  Her father shifted uncomfortably from one foot to the other.

“You’re not likely to find a better match, Papa.  They’re practically royalty.  You know that better than anyone.  Our family has worked for them for generations.”

“He means that I’m not good enough for you,” said Terrence.

“That’s not what he means,” said Yuah.  “That’s not what you mean, is it, Papa?”

“Well, yes it is.  And of course there is the question of religion…”

“It’s been settled,” said Yuah.

“You’re too young to get married,” said Zeah.

“I’m almost twenty-seven!” shouted Yuah, with a slight edge of hysteria to her voice.  “I’m already an old maid!  If I wait any longer, my insides will shrivel up and blow away!”

Zeah stared at his daughter for a moment, watching her flushed face as she gulped for air, her corset and her excitement combining to take her very close to a swoon.  Then he looked at Terrence, searching his face for some inkling of motivation.

“I can’t appreciate his look either,” said Terrence to Yuah.

“There’s no hurry,” Zeah said at last.  “Why don’t you plan a spring wedding?  We can have it done right.  A big wedding.  Everyone will want to be there.”

“We are doing it now,” said Yuah.  “There is no Zaeri Imam, so you have to do a civil ceremony.  If you won’t, we’ll go and have Brother Galen marry us under Kafira’s watchful eyes.”

“We need a best man and a maid of honor.”

“You can have your secretary stand in, and get one of the soldiers outside to be the best man.  We don’t care who it is.  Anyone would be proud to stand up for a Dechantagne.”

Zeah took a deep breath and stepped close to Terrence.  “You must take care of her.”

“She will always be provided for,” said Terrence, though it sounded to no one in the room as if they meant the same thing.

It was only a few minutes later when Zeah unhappily began the civil marriage ceremony for his daughter and Terrence Dechantagne.  The two of them were framed on either side by his secretary Cadence Gertz and young Saba Colbshallow.  There wasn’t much to it, really.  He asked Terrence if he would love and cherish, and then he asked Yuah if she would honor and obey.  They both replied, “I will”.

“I don’t suppose you have a ring?” he asked.

“That’s our next stop,” said Terrence.

Then it was over.  He recorded the date on the certificate and all five of them signed it.  Oddly, as everyone filed out the door, only Miss Gertz looked really happy.

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Hertzal Hertling

The Dark and Forbidding LandI thought it was a stroke of genius when I created the Hertling twins, but I guess it was necessity.  When you have a story about twelve-year-olds, you can’t just have two.  You need a third so that you have a triangle.  I simply made the third child a pair of twins.

I introduced the twins in book 1, and they become major parts of the story in book 3, running around Port Dechantagne with Senta and Graham.  In book 2, I got to preview that a bit and I found myself with a chance to play with Hertzal a bit.

Usually when characters interact with the twins, they are interacting with Hero, Hertzal’s sister, because Hertzal doesn’t talk.  He hasn’t talked since witnessing his parents’ murders.  Here is Hertzal in a rare scene without his sister.

When the sandwiches had been completed, Senta delivered Zurfina’s to the appropriate location.  Then she put away the ingredients by hand and sat down at the table to enjoy hers.  She was only on her second bite when there was a knock at the door.    As she opened it, the cold air from outside blew across her bare shins and feet.  It had stopped snowing a couple of days before, but it was still cold out and the world was still covered with a thick blanket of white.  Standing outside and shivering was Hertzal Hertling.

“Hertzal!” squealed Senta, giving him a great hug.  “Where is your sister?  Didn’t she come with you?”

Hertzal remained as quiet as he always did, but shook his head.  Two years before, when he and his two sisters had escaped their former homeland of Freedonia, their parents had both been killed by soldiers.  Hertzal, who up until that time has seemed a perfectly normal boy, had lost his voice.  And there seemed to be no reason to expect its return any time soon.

“Come in and get warm.”  Senta pulled the boy into the house and closed the door after him.  “Are you hungry?”

Hertzal shrugged.

Taking this as an affirmative, Senta cut her sandwich in half and gave him the portion with no bite taken out of it.

“I’ll put on some tea.”

Hertzal took a bite of the sandwich and smiled with his blue lips closed.

Senta put the pot on the cast iron stove.

“Nothing’s wrong, is it?” she asked.

Hertzal shook his head.

“It’s only that I don’t see you very often by yourself.”

She crossed back to the stove and sat down.

“What’s Hero doing?”

He shrugged.

“Do you know where Graham is?”

He shook his head.

“So… kind of hard to have a conversation with you.”

Hertzal looked down at the table, took a bite of his sandwich and nodded sadly.

“That’s okay.  Really.  I don’t mind.” 

The kettle on the stove started to whistle, and Senta went and got it.  She transferred the water to a teapot, put loose leaves of tea into an infuser and dropped the infuser into the teapot as well.  Then she brought the pot and two cups to the table.

“You know, I bet I can be as quiet as you.”

Hertzal shook his head.

“Let’s see.  Ready, set.”  She silently mouthed the word “go.”

They finished their sandwiches and tea, looking back and forth at one another.  Afterwards Hertzal helped Senta take the plates, cups, and teapot to the sink and wash them.  Then Senta took him by the hand and led him to the bookcase next to Bessemer’s corner and pulled a wooden box from the bottom shelf.  With a flourish, she pointed to the words burned into the top of the box that spelled out “checkers.”  Hertzal smiled and they sat down to set up the board and begin the first of several games.  By mid-afternoon Hertzal had won six while Senta had won four.  He looked at her and cocked his head to the side.

“I didn’t let you win!” She slapped both hands to her mouth.  “Kafira!  You tricked me.”

Hertzal shrugged.  

“Are you going to stay for tea?”

Hertzal looked at the ceiling.

“I don’t think Zurfina will be down again today.  When she goes up to her study, she usually stays a good long while.”

He looked left, right, and then down near his feet.

“No.  Bessemer is out hunting or flying or some such.”

He raised an eyebrow.

“No, I’m not worried.  Fina says that he’s old enough to stay out of trouble.”

He raised the other eyebrow.

“No, I don’t believe it either.”

Hertzal jerked his head in the direction of the door.

“I don’t think your sister would like it if I came to your house for tea.  Honor, I mean.  I don’t think she likes me.”

He nodded.

“Well, if you’re sure.”

Nodding again, the boy got up and began putting on his coat.  Senta searched around for her own outer clothing and boots, as well as the snowshoes that Graham had given her.  When they were both suitably bundled, they headed out the door into the snow.

“So when are your moving in to your new place?”

Hertzal stared at her.

“You’re already there?  When did you move in?”

He held up two fingers.

“The day before yesterday?  You should have called me.  I could have helped you.”

He shrugged.

“Yeah.  I guess you guys didn’t really have all that much stuff to move.  It’s like me when I got here.  I didn’t have anything but my doll and the clothes that Fina gave me.”

Hetzal nodded knowingly.

“You know, I guess it’s not so hard to hold a conversation with you after all.”

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Terrence Dechantagne

Terrence Dechantagne is a character that I’m very proud of.  He’s very heroic, kind of Indiana Jones on the outside, but he’s completely messed up on the inside– a drug addict and filled with self-loathing.  In Book 1: The Voyage of the Minotaur, he goes from the great hero and just sort of spirals down as far as you can go.  I remember reading his part to my writers group and reveling in their shock at what I did to him.  He barely appears in Book 3: The Drache Girl to make his swan song.

When I went back to write Book 0: Brechalon as a prequel, I just played with the darker Terrence from book 1.  The real challenge was to write him in Book 2: The Dark and Forbidding Land, in which he’s already been broken as much as a human can be.  And yet, he has this important part to play in pulling Yuah into his family.  It’s really not a win for either of them.  I think I ended up with some really good moments for him in the book.  Here is a scene in which he comes to Cissy’s rescue– something I think no one would expect from him.

Cissy made her way around the corner of the motor shed, but stopped short when she almost ran into Shoss.  He was a nondescript lizzie who had come from Chusstuss and had been hired at the Dechantagne house shortly after Cissy.  She started to step around him, but he moved so that he was in her way.

“What do you want?” hissed Cissy.

“Where have you been?”

“None of your business.”

“It is my business now.”

“Leave me alone.”

“I am not going to leave you alone.  I am going to be right here, all the time.  It is known that you have no people.  Tserich doesn’t want you.  None of the other villages will want you either.  Nobody wants you.  That means you have no hut elder.”

“I do not need a village.  I do not need a hut elder.”

“I will be your hut elder.  You are going to give me your copper bits.”

“I will not.”

“If you do not, I will cut that pretty tail of yours.”

“Is there a problem?” 

It took Cissy a moment to realize that the words were not in the lizzie language, but rather the warbling tongue of the humans.  Terrence Dechantagne stepped from behind Cissy, one hand on her shoulder.  With his other hand, he reached out and touched Shoss’s snout.  Shoss was only average height for a lizzie male, but that put him several inches taller than the human, and he was not hunkering down, as he and the others so often did.

“No trodlent,” said Shoss.  His Brech was not as good as many of the other lizzies on staff.

“That’s not what it sounded like to me.”

Shoss looked confused.  It was clear that he was uncomfortable talking to a human.  He still was not making himself small.  He had either forgotten how to act or realizing that this particular human couldn’t see him, decided not to make the effort.

“Go.  No trodlent”

“Is this lizzie causing you a problem?”

Cissy glanced quickly around.  This sentence seemed as though it was aimed at another human, but there wasn’t one around.  It had to have been directed at her.  Before she could say anything though, Shoss, his face beginning to turn dark with frustration hissed out an angry reply in his native language.

“You stupid blind piece of excrement.  You should be left in the forest so that the feathered runners can feast on your entrails.”

Without warning Terrence pulled a revolver out of his pocket and fired.  The bullet hit Shoss in his abdomen, and he dropped to the ground.  The human gingerly kicked him with the toe of his boot, and once sure where he was lying, aimed the gun downward and fired four more times.  Shoss’s body slowly uncurled, ending up in an odd and vaguely unsettling position.  His eyes looked up blankly at the sky.

“I only know a few of those words,” said the man, kicking the now dead lizzie, twice, hard.  “I don’t need you to tell me I’m ghahkut.  I know it every time I get up in the morning and can’t see anything.  And I owe it to your kind!”

Cissy hunkered down as small as she could go, but Terrence didn’t turn toward her.  Suddenly they were surrounded by a dozen humans and lizzies.  Mrs. Dechantagne grabbed hold of her husband around the waist, but he shrugged her off.  Sisson bent down to check Shoss, but there was no doubt that he was dead.

“What is going on here?” demanded Governor Dechantagne-Calliere.

“No need to bother yourself, sister,” said Terrence, anger still hanging on his every syllable.  “I was just disciplining the staff.”

“Are you all right?  He didn’t hurt you, did he?” asked Mrs. Dechantagne.

“Where’s Tisson?” called Terrence.

“Here.”

“Get this piece of ssotook out of my garden.”

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Graham Dokkins

The Dark and Forbidding LandGraham Dokkins is a character who has a lot of influence in the story of Senta and the Steel Dragon.  He is introduced in book 1, has a very large part in book 3, and small but important parts in books 2 and 4, and 5.  He is somebody whose presence is felt even when he’s not there, because the other characters talk about him.  One of my favorite parts in The Dark and Forbidding Land is the encounter between Graham and Senta with a couple of utahraptors.

Suddenly Graham stopped, putting his arm out to stop her as well.  Senta watched him as he slipped the strap of the rifle from his shoulder.  Only after he had pressed the butt of the stock to his shoulder did she look to see what had alarmed him.  Stalking slowly toward them, skirting the edge of the trees on the right hand side of the road were two monstrous feathered creatures.  They must have been the same two utahraptors that Aalwijn Finkler had seen.  They were magnificent creatures, cloaked in turquoise feathers that slowly turned to forest green at the end of their long tufted tails.  Those tails stuck straight out behind them, making their total length nearly twenty-five feet.  Their heads, eight feet above the ground, moved forward and back as they walked.  One of them would have been more than a match for a grown man.

Graham carefully aimed down the length of the barrel.  He squeezed the trigger, but nothing happened.  Lowering the weapon, he flipped the safety to the fire position, and then sighted again.  This time when he fired there was a satisfying crack.  The utahraptors stopped, startled for a moment, but seemed uninjured.  Graham worked the action and fired again.  This time Senta saw the bullet strike the trunk of a massive redwood about twenty feet above the ground and quite a bit behind the predators.

“It’s not sited in right,” muttered Graham, as he pulled back the bolt.

This time, as with the first shot, they were unable to determine where the missile hit.

“Um, aim at their feet and a bit to the right of them,” advised Senta.

This time the bullet hit a tree just to the right of the foremost creature.

“The next one is in your head!” called Graham as if he had intended the previous shots as warnings. 

The utahraptor did not look at all impressed.  He and his cohort were not much more than fifty feet away.  When they charged they could clear that distance in the blink of an eye.  For the moment though they were still being wary of the strange little creatures that made loud booming noises and refused to run.

“You better stand behind me,” said Graham bravely.

The Dark and Forbidding Land: Saba Colbshallow

The Dark and Forbidding LandIn The Dark and Forbidding Land, Saba Colbshallow becomes one of the major characters.  He was around a lot in The Voyage of the Minotaur.  I didn’t really realize how much until I reread it.  He’s hanging around when much of the important changes happen. In this book, he had to be a major protagonist, and his part of the book I think turned out really well.

Also, in this book I needed to introduce Eamon Shrubb.  He and Saba would become an important duo in Book 3.  They remain an important duo in Book 6 as I’m writing it now.  Here is their first meeting.

Saba Colbshallow sat on a piece of log.  It was one of many which had been provided for local lizzies to sit.  His left hand was full of small pebbles and he was tossing them with his right hand at a half rusted tin that had originally held butter biscuits.  Most of the thrown missiles missed their mark and even when one did land in the tin it didn’t improve his mood.  He had been in a bad mood for an entire week now, ever since the wedding.  Could you call that a wedding?  Five minutes in the Mayor’s office?  Yuah deserved much better than that.  She deserved much better than Master Terrence too.  Saba wanted to say that she deserved him, but he knew that he wasn’t good enough for her either.  She was an angel.  He had loved her ever since he was seven.  Then she had been a burgeoning sixteen-year-old beauty, with long dark brown hair and the most incredible eyelashes.  Of course before that, he had fancied Iolanthe, now Governor Dechantagne-Calliere.  But that was before she had changed.  Not that he blamed her; he understood.  Iolanthe was married, and now Yuah was too.  And here he was, an eighteen-year-old corporal in the militia, and didn’t even have a girl.

“Colbshallow, right?”

Saba looked up to see a big man standing a few feet from him.  Saba was six foot three and this fellow was just as tall, but with broader shoulders and a thick muscular chest.  Though the man was a few years older than Saba, he was only a private.

“That’s right.”

“I’m Shrubb, Eamon Shrubb.”

“Nice to meet you, Shrubb.”  Saba slowly stood up and stretched out a hand, which Shrubb took.

“What’s your Kafirite name, if you don’t mind my asking?” asked Shrubb.  “Um… you are a Kafirite, aren’t you?”

Saba nodded.

“I’ve never seen so many zeets before.”

“I don’t much care for that word,” said Saba, icily.  He was still thinking about Yuah and was predisposed to dislike anyone whom he thought might be aiming an insult even in her general direction.

“Quite right.  Quite right.  As I say, I’ve never met many zee… Zaeri.  I don’t have anything against them though.  I never understood that whole ‘killed Kafira’ thing anyway.  I mean, didn’t she come back from the dead?  That’s a big part of the church.  How could she have come back from the dead if nobody killed her?  All worked out for the best, as far as I can see.”

“Do you always talk this much?” asked Saba.

“No.”  Shrubb looked pensive.  “Quite uncharacteristic really.”

“Good.  My first name is Saba.  What would you say to some fish and chips?”

“I don’t generally talk to my food.”