Brechalon – My Own Review

Brechalon (New Cover)I’ve been reading Senta and the Steel Dragon and have been doing a bit of editing and revising of the same as I go along.  I’ve had a change of opinion about some of these books.  I had the image of what I was thinking as I wrote them as my main view.  Now that I have a bit of time between writing and reading, I think I have a bit more perspective on them.  Here is a quick review of my own book.

When I wrote Brechalon, I was not overly happy with it.  It was designed to be a bit of extra to go along with The Voyage of the Minotaur.  Now I see it more favorably.  There isn’t a lot of plot in this book– no great events or adventures.  But there is a great deal of back story.  There is also a lot of set up for The Voyage of the Minotaur, so much so, that I really wouldn’t recommend reading it without reading Brechalon first.

The book follows the characters of Senta, Iolanthe, Terrence, Zurfina, Zeah, Yuah, and Augie, as they go about their lives.  Angie is arguably in the most adventuresome story, as he is in Birmisia, dealing with dinosaurs and lizzies.  Senta is still a kid.  Iolanthe is plotting and planning.  Yeah is pining for Terrence.  Zeah is being Zeah.  In all of their cases, the book is mostly characterization.  The characters with real plot are Terrence as he descends into drug abuse, and Zurfina who attempts to get out of prison.

I enjoyed this book, but then, why wouldn’t I?  I wrote it.  If you don’t trust me, check it out on your own.  It’s available free wherever fine ebooks are sold.

The Voyage of the Minotaur – Updated Ebook

I’ve just uploaded a new and revised (oxymoron, isn’t it) edition of The Voyage of the Minotaur.  Mostly the changes consist of correcting the incorrect use of the word “which” when it should have been “that”, and vice-versa.

In any case, if you have previously purchased The Voyage of the Minotaur, you should be able to download the latest edition from your ebookstore.  If you haven’t yet tried out the Senta and the Steel Dragon Series, I invite you to do so.

You can read Brechalon right here, or download it free from Smashwords, then get The Voyage of the Minotaur, wherever fine ebooks are sold.

First Work vs. Prequel

Brechalon (New Cover)I struggle with whether to tell people to read Breachalon (Book 0 in Senta and the Steel Dragon) before or after reading books 1-5.  Brechalon is an actual prequel.  It is book 0 in the series, but I didn’t write it until I had already written books 1, 3, and 5.  Therefore I had to think very carefully about what I wanted to reveal.  Some of the plot points from book 0 are surprises that happen later in the series.  Other elements have more impact if the reader has read the rest of the series before reading book 0.

An example of the former is Zurfina in prison.  In the rest of the books, we don’t hear about Zurfina being imprisoned until book 5 nearing the end of the original series.  It explains a great deal about her character, but not revealing it until book 5 made it a huge revelation.  By revealing it in book 0, it detracts from that a bit, even though I like the story line with her in prison in Brechalon.

An example of the latter is Zurfina’s nickname for Senta.  Beginning in book 1 and right through the entire series, Zurfina seldom if ever refers to Senta by her name.  Instead, she calls her “Pet.”  It seems on the surface a sweet nickname for your child and it stands in the face of some of Zurfina’s careless actions as far as child-rearing goes.  You can say, well, you know she loves Senta.  She calls her Pet.  Then in book 0, you find Zurfina calling Chapman the same name– this a man she has no feelings for and actually plans to destroy and maybe use as a sacrifice.  It kind of has a chilling effect when you then hear her giving this eight-year-old child the same nickname.

Writing or Reading?

I’m in the second week of my new grad classes.  Twenty-one and a half weeks to go.  A research paper a week, plus essentially daily blog posts.  Add that to preparing for my students and grading about 4,000 assignments from them.  Plus some time in there, I have to find time to eat, go to the bathroom, and maybe talk to my wife.  I’m not finding any time to write my stories.

I have been reading though.  I’ve always enjoyed reading and always had a book with me for moments when I found myself waiting for someone or something.  Now I’ve got my iPhone loaded with about 1,000 books.  I’ve read some good ones by people other than me.  Right now though, I’m reading Senta and the Steel Dragon.  It may sound funny that I’m reading my own books (for maybe the hundredth time), but the secret is… I really wrote them for myself, so I can’t help but enjoy them.  Of course I’m also looking for typos and mistakes and find a few, which I’ll fix and upload new versions.

So far over the past two weeks or so, I’ve read Brechalon, The Voyage of the Minotaur, The Dark and Forbidding Land, and I’ve just started The Drache Girl.  I find The Voyage of the Minotaur a little slow, but once you get to about chapter five, it really takes off.  The slow start is sort of mitigated if you read Brechalon first– you can read it as a straight first volume, or later as a prequel.  The Dark and Forbidding Land I loved.  I forgot just how much I loved it until I finished it again.  It is my most tyrannosaurus-heavy book.  I think it works pretty good as a stand-alone too.

Well, enjoy your February, and happy reading.

Writing Here, Writing There

Well, this past week I’ve started classes– the last classes I will take in my lifetime.  It’s an 18 credit program: three six week classes, one after another, followed by three concurrent classes lasting five weeks.  So, a total of 23 weeks.  During that time, I’ll be doing a lot of writing, but most of it will be for research papers and the like.

Even though my personal writing time will be much more limited, I’m going to try and keep up. I’m very close to finishing my next novel draft.  I won’t tell you which one it is yet, but I feel like I can write, revise, edit, edit, edit, and publish within 23 weeks, even given the my small amount of free time.

I find myself thinking more and more about my retirement from teaching.  This isn’t because I’m no longer gratified with what I do.  I am.  But I’m more and more worn out by it.  I’ve still got at least five years to go.  I consider 26 years of teaching quite an accomplishment, since most teachers I’ve known don’t last 10 years.  When I get there, I’ll be satisfied.

But I’m really looking forward to making my writing a vocation instead of an avocation.  I want to get up, have a cup of tea.  Write until I’m hungry, have brunch, and go back to writing.  I’ll finish by early afternoon (keeping close to my school schedule).  Then I’ll enjoy my day and won’t spend it thinking about what crisis will await me tomorrow.

 

His Robot Girlfriend: Charity on the iBooks Best-Seller Chart

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His Robot Wife: Charity briefly made it onto the Sci-Fi & Fantasy best-seller chart at iBooks, at one point up to #68.  It has since fallen, but I’m very excited about it being there.  The original His Robot Girlfriend continues to appear at the top of the Free books list, currently #10 on the Sci-Fi & Fantasy iBooks best sellers.

His Robot Girlfriend: Charity – Excerpt

HRG Charity“Who is it, dear?” called a woman’s voice, as a sylph-like figure danced out of a back doorway.

“Visitors.  They’re going to be staying a couple of days.”

“How exciting,” she said, hurrying forward.  “We never have overnight company.”

She was within arm’s reach before Dakota realized that she was a robot.  Tall and thin, with short blond hair and blue eyes, she was dressed in a yellow sundress.

“This is my wife, Mindy,” said Stephen.

“You’re kidding,” said Dakota.

“No, I’m not fucking kidding!  She means a lot to me—a hell of a lot more than you do!”

“Shh,” said Mindy.  “You’ll wake the children, dear.”

“Mindy, please show them to the guest room.”  Stephen looked at Dakota.  “We’ll talk tomorrow.  I have to get ready for work.”

Mindy smiled at Dakota and then locked eyes with Charity.  They both froze for a split second.  Then she beckoned them after her, as she walked like a game show spokes-model to the rear of the room.  Exiting through a doorway took them from a small living room down a long hall.

“That’s Tag’s room on the left” said Mindy.   The one just past it is the guest room.  Stephen and I are at the very end of the hall, and the twins are across from you.  I’ll try to remind them not to bother you, but they haven’t had much experience with visitors.”

“That’s fine,” said Dakota.  “I don’t exactly know how to ask… how old are the children?”

“Tag is thirteen.  The twins are eight.”

The guest room was small but neat, with a double bed covered by a crocheted comforter and with a large painting of a cat on the wall.

“You can used the bathroom across the hall,” said Mindy.  “Clean towels are in the rack just inside the door.  If you need anything else, let me know.”

She left, closing the door behind her.

“It’s like some sort of domestic Twilight Zone,” said Dakota.

“She seemed nice,” said Charity.  “Remember what I told you about Daffodil Amontes?  About them making excellent wives?”

“She seems like a robot.  I mean, even if she wasn’t a robot, she’d seem like a robot.  And since Stephen didn’t have any kids when I saw him last, I’m really interested to get a look at them.”

“You should get some sleep,” she said, peeling the bedding back for him.  “I can stand quietly in the corner, or if you’d prefer, I could stand in the closet.”

“Why don’t you just lie down over there?”  He pointed to the left side of the bed.

If the truth were known, Dakota actually preferred sleeping with someone else.  He had been doing it for more than four years now.  Rachel had insisted that they not get a bed larger than a standard double.  He had complained, saying that there wasn’t enough room for him to turn over.  Now he had missed it for three nights.  Sleeping with the robot was not quite the same.  She didn’t feel plastic; her skin was as soft and supple as a real woman’s would have been.  She was hotter than a real person though, at least in some places.  In others, she was cooler.  But if he just lay there—if he didn’t touch her and feel the differences in temperature, and her shape, then it was almost like sleeping with Rachel.

She was gone when he woke up.  When he climbed out of bed, he found his suitcase on the floor by the door.  Pulling out a clean set of clothes, he crossed the hallway and took a hot shower.  When he was done, he brushed his teeth and then ran his hand through four days of whiskers.  He would have to either buy a razor or learn to live with a beard.

In the front of the house, Dakota found the dining room.  Charity was sitting at the table with three children.  They were just as mechanical as she was.  The boy looked enough like Stephen to be his real son, but he wasn’t.  He was a robot.  The two eight-year-old girls looked like their mother, with similar bright yellow dresses.  All four of them sat with nothing but water bottles in front of them.

“Sit here,” said Charity, vacating her chair for him.  “Mindy has made you some waffles.”

At the sound of her name, Mindy danced out of the kitchen, holding a plate of waffles high in one hand and a bottle of syrup in the other.  She sat them directly in front of Dakota and pirouetted away.

“Do you prefer coffee or milk?”

“I’ll take a Coke if you’ve got one.”

“Here’s a glass of milk.  We don’t keep sodas in the house.”  She sat a tall glass of milk in front of him.  “Say hello, children.”

“Hello,” they all said primly and in unison.

His Robot Girlfriend: Charity – Excerpt

HRG CharityThe sun was really beating down when Dakota Hawk pulled his pickup to a stop next to the metal cargo container that GoodWorks was using as the drop location from which to collect donations of clothing, furniture, and electronics.  When he climbed out of the cab, his foot slid in the half molten asphalt.  The poor bastard, who was earning a dollar less than minimum wage to sit in the heat and collect the donations, stepped out from the container’s interior, dripping sweat, his hair plastered to his forehead.

“Back again?  What are you trying to do, get rid of everything?”

“As much as possible,” said Dakota.  “Do you have water in there?  Maybe a fan?”

“Oh yeah.  I’ve got a nifty little setup.  Come in and look.”

The air outside was well over 140 degrees Fahrenheit, and it was just as hot inside.  It was even more oven-like.  The back third of the container was filled with cardboard boxes and plastic trash bags full of who-knows-what.  Along the left side were a few pieces of larger furniture.  Along the right hand wall were a dozen non-animated robots—a couple with clothes, but most naked.  Just inside the entrance sat a chaise lounge next to a mini-refrigerator with an electric fan sitting atop it.  A long orange cord ran out the door, across the parking lot, and was plugged into the back of McDonalds.

“Sweet,” said Dakota, and then he turned back to his truck and began unloading the black bags filled with clothing and household goods.  He handed them to the guy, who then stacked them in back.  By the time they were done, his own long, blond hair was plastered to his face.

“Mostly clothes, feels like.”

“Yes, mostly clothes.”

Dakota had spent all morning trying to empty out the apartment.  The first hour had been taken up getting his own things.  He had packed up his vueTee and his other electronics, and then his clothes.  That had filled up the back of the truck, leaving just enough room for the two crappy chairs his dad had given him.  He’d taken it all to the Jiffy Locker and rented a storeroom, their smallest size.  After unloading, he had made one final sweep through the apartment, taking whatever was left that he wanted—nothing more than a few photographs and mementos.  Then he had spent the next five hours hauling as many of Rachel’s belongings away as possible and donating them to GoodWorks.  He realized he could be charged with theft, but he didn’t care.  Her closet was empty, her wriTee and all her files were gone, she had no pots and pans and no fine silverware, her underwear drawer was empty, and her grandmother’s Depression era glassware collection was history.  He looked at his watch.  There wasn’t time to make another trip before she got off work.

He looked back into the cargo container.

“Say, what are you going to do with these old robots?” Dakota asked.

“They have a group that recycles them for parts.  Most of them are Gizmos, and you can’t really fix them anymore.”

Dakota looked them over.  They were mostly Gizmos, but not all.  He recognized a Braun… and something else.  A naked female robot, waist bent at an anatomically impossible angle stared at the wall.  A curtain of long brown hair was brushed aside just enough for Dakota to make out three small holes in the back of the neck, and beneath them, a button.

“How much do you suppose they’ll get for them?”

“Oh, a few hundred each, I suppose.  Most of them don’t work at all.”

“Could I buy one?”

“We don’t sell them to the public.”

“Seems a shame,” Dakota said.  “I’d give you $500 for that one there, right now.”

“Well, we don’t even know if it works.”

“You wouldn’t have to worry about it.  Cash deal.  No exchanges or refunds.”  He pulled his phone out of his pocket and typed in $500, waving it back and forth in front of the guy’s eyes.

The guy reached into his own pocket for his phone.

“You can’t tell anyone about this,” he said.  “You know, because they don’t want us selling them.”

He pressed his phone to Dakota’s; transferring the $500 into what they both knew was the guy’s personal account.

“Nobody’s going to hear anything about it from me.  Help me load it?”

My Writing: Part Eight

Desperate Poems

I had written a thousand poems when I was in my teens. Over the years, I had sporadically written more poetry. I decided the time was right to publish them in ebook form. Of course I wouldn’t expect anyone to pay for my poetry, so it would be a free offering. I had already collected a pretty good cross section of my poems, so I just formatted it all together, and sent it out into cyberspace. I tried out about a thousand titles for the volume, before I finally settled on Desperate Poems.

Astrid Maxxim and the Antarctic Expedition

When I wrote Astrid Maxxim and her Undersea Dome, I had simply continued on at the end until I ran out of steam. When I stopped, I had the first four or five chapters of a third Astrid Maxxim book. The book would take Astrid to Antarctica. Then I went off and wrote Patience is a Virtue, taking the characters there to the Antarctic too.

When I finally got back to Astrid, I decided that I would include global warming as part of the plot. I already had an element from the first book that would tie into the South Pole. I needed some danger in the story, so I read up on some real life events concerning Antarctic wildlife and fictionalized them. I had written a much looser outline than usual, and when I was halfway through the book, I suddenly realized that my chapters were too long. I wanted some uniformity with the other books of the series. So, I went back and split chapters up, but I still ended up slightly off.

Astrid Maxxim and her Hypersonic Space Plane

I was really into the Astrid Maxxim mode when I finished writing Antarctic Expedition. In fact, I feel like I didn’t really hit my stride in that book until I was finishing it up. I immediately started on the next book. This is really the one in which the main character starts to grow up. She was already one part Tom Swift and one part Walt Disney. Now she started becoming a little bit Steve Jobs. She was becoming a genius with a bit of an edge.

Once again I hired Matthew Riggenback at Shaed Studios to do the covers and I had him design them for books three, four, and five. Just as I had before, I continued writing past the end of Astrid Maxxim and her Hypersonic Space Plane, creating the first few chapters of the next book before setting it down to do something else. So I don’t know when I’ll get to it, but Astrid Maxxim and the Electric Racecar Challenge awaits completion. In the meantime, I think that Astrid Maxxim and her Hypersonic Space Plane is the best in the series so far.

His Robot Wife: Charity

I have noticed (and others have as well) that I tend to write about similar things in different stories. I wrote two stories set in Antarctica, relatively close together. I had very similar conversations in The Drache Girl and Tesla’s Stepdaughters—different topics, but a similar format. I was working on a (as yet unpublished) story involving a cheating spouse. This was still on my mind when I came up with a plot for a new robot book. For the first time a robot story came to me in a sort of natural way, like other stories. For that reason, I think it’s the best of the four robot books.

Because of the plot, I needed entirely new characters for this story. I tied it in with the other books by placing it in the same setting and then I had some of the characters from the earlier books—Mike and Ryan—appear in this one as well. Ryan has gone from being a car salesman to a realtor. Finishing this book gave me several ideas for new books, each of which would need its own character set. This could be problematic, because I think readers expect to see Patience return. I would really like to do another Mike and Patience story too, but I’m not going to unless I have a real story to tell.

 

 

 

My Writing: Part Seven

Astrid Maxxim and her Undersea Dome

After writing the first Astrid Maxxim book, I made a list of about twenty possible titles. Just like the Tom Swift books that had inspired them, each book would be Astrid Maxxim and her (Insert Invention Here). The second Tom Swift book was Tom Swift and his Submarine and number seven was Tom Swift and his Diving Seacopter—one of my favorites. So I wanted to do an undersea adventure. All of Astrid’s inventions grow out of the others, so the idea of an undersea dome fit perfectly.

I had hired Matthew Riggenback at Shaed Studios to design the first Astrid Maxxim cover and so I wanted him to do any others to maintain the feel of a series. I was even more jazzed about his second cover than I had been about the first, and that’s saying something. In the end, everything came together and I’m really proud of the books. I’ve given a lot of the Astrid Maxxim books away to students and other youngsters, and I offer the ebooks free to libraries.

His Robot Wife: Patience is a Virtue

Sales of His Robot Wife were starting to slow, even though it was still by far my best seller. I decided that I would write another book in the series. This time though, I would put more effort into it—make it a longer, better book. I wrote an outline and worked on it extensively before starting. About halfway into the book though, I had a change of heart about what I wanted to focus on. I decided that the book should reflect much more of Patience’s point of view than Mike’s. This ended up making His Robot Wife: Patience is a Virtue more difficult than it otherwise would have been. I think the book turned out pretty good though, and it is my second best selling book.

As a side note, I used the same model for the cover art of all three books, and purchased the rights to several other poses, for possible use in future books. This model is extremely popular in royalty free art, and I see her on bulletin boards, web sites, and once on a huge poster in front of the spa at Circus Circus hotel in Vegas.

The Sorceress and her Lovers

It had been two years since the publication of the last book in the Senta and the Steel Dragon series, but had actually been seven years since I wrote the previous volume. The plot had been setup in the original epilog of The Two Dragons, which I had cut from the book. I added a bit of conflict. The only completely new part of the story was the part dealing with the Lizard King Hsrandtuss. I had introduced him in The Young Sorceress, but hadn’t planned anything else for him. When I had written the outline for The Sorceress and her Lovers, I wrote the outline for the next book as well. I don’t know when I’ll get to write The Price of Magic, but I’ll get to it eventually

I really liked returning to the world of the Steel Dragon, however, things have changed so much and characters have grown up, so that it has a bit of an unreal quality to it for me. I don’t know if that comes across to the reader or not. In the end, it’s not my favorite book in the series, but I like it.