The Young Sorceress- Chapter 3 Excerpt

Cissy finished tying the yellow bonnet below Terra’s chin and stood up.  The bonnet matched her cute little yellow dress.  Where was the boy?  He had been here just a moment before.  It seemed so odd.  Human children were almost unable to move when they were born, but by their second year, they were almost as quick and wild as lizzie offspring.
“Hyah!” shouted Augie, jumping out from behind the door.
Cissy threw her hands up, shaking them in mock fear.  Terra squealed and then laughed, just as she did every day when her brother jumped out at her.
“Now come,” said the reptilian, scooping up the girl, and taking the boy with her other hand.
“Where are you off to?” asked Mrs. Dechantagne, when they reached the foyer.  She was still in her night dress, though it was well past noon.
“To the store.  Yuah come too?”
“Not this time.  I have a headache.  I’m going to take a nap.”  She looked down at the children.  “You both look precious.  Give Mama a kiss.”
First Avenue was one of the most well traveled roads in the colony, at least on the east side.  It stretched from Town Square to the small homes of Zaeritown, along the way passing the largest homes in Port Dechantagne—some deserving the title of mansion.  Dozens of lizzie work crews were here, laying bricks on the roadways, pouring cement sidewalks, or installing little wrought iron fencing around the trees that were designated not to be cut down.  Many of the lizzies stopped to stare at the female with two human children.
A large male who was pushing a wheelbarrow in the opposite direction from the Dechantagne children and their nanny, Cissy knew him only by his human name of Zinny, hissed “khikheto tonahass hoonan.”
“Kichketos tatacas khikheto tonahass hoonan?” asked Augie, looking up at Cissy.
“Talk hoonan,” she ordered.
“What did he mean you ate a human?” asked the boy.  “Who did you eat?”
“I not eat… Cissy is lizzie.  Cissy act hoonan.  Tsass khenos khikheto tonahass hoonan.  Lizzie on outside  Hoonan on inside.”
“That’s stupid,” said the boy.  “You don’t act like a human.  You just act like Cissy.”
She reached out a clawed hand and tousled his hair.
The inside of Mr. Parnorsham’s Pfennig store was crowded with patrons, both reptilian and warm-blooded.   The proprietor, a bespectacled older man with very little hair who was shorter than Cissy, waved over the shoulder of his human customer as they came inside.  Cissy walked the children through the aisles to the toy counter.  It was a small twenty four inch square counter divided into six inch square compartments, each with a different type of toy.  There were rubber bouncing balls, toy airships, tin soldiers, doll sized tea cups with saucers, and wooden dogs which could be pulled by a string.  Augie immediately went for the red-coated tin soldiers, pulling them out one after another and comparing their poses.
“I wanna see,” complained Terra.
Cissy lifted her up so that she could see over the top of the counter.  She picked up two of the soldiers and held them close to her face.
“Boy soldiers.”
The bell above the doorway rang again and another female lizzie entered pulling along two human boys by the hands.  Cissy recognized Sanny, who had worked in the Stephenson home, working her way through the other patrons to the toy counter.
“Tsaua Sassannasanach.”
“Tsaua Ssissiatok.”
“Tsaua Claude, Tsaua Julius,” said Augie to the boys.
“Tsaua Augie,” they replied, not quite in unison.
The boys immediately started in on a conversation about the tin soldiers and the limited number of poses that were available for them.
“Did you see Angorikhas this morning?” asked Sanny quietly in the lizzie tongue.
“No, I didn’t see him today.  I know who you mean.”
“They say he disfigured Szarakha and blinded one of her eyes.”
“Szarakha?”
“The Kordeshack maid; the one the humans call Sorry.”
“Why did he do that?  And if he did, why is he still here?”
“You know why,” said Sanny.  “Szarakha khikheto tonahass hoonan.  And as for the why… you know the humans don’t care what happens to us.”
Cissy abruptly stopped the conversation with a wave of her hand, as she looked down to see the three boys paying careful attention.
“Inghaa nicta Cissy…” said Augie.
“Talk hoonan.”
“I won’t let anyone hurt you, Cissy.”
“Little child not to whorry.  Cissy is fine.”
“I’ll punch that Angorikhas right in the goolies,” pronounced Augie.
“Yeah,” agreed Claude Stephenson, though his younger brother seemed less sure.
Cissy hissed mirthfully, partially at his sentiment and partially because she understood that he had no idea where the goolies might actually located on a male lizzie.
“I want the park,” said Terra.  “Park, park, park!  Let’s go!”
“Yessss,” acknowledged Cissy.
She bid farewell to the other nanny and ushered the children to where Mr. Parnorsham stood behind the counter.  Augie had a tin soldier in his hand and when Cissy picked up the little girl to set her on the counter, she saw that one of the small red-coats was clutched in her fist as well.
“Two soldiers.  Three Dillingdoe’s.  Account.”

“Two toy soldiers and three cold bottles of Billingbow’s sarsaparilla and wintergreen soda water.  That’s one mark fifty two P on the Dechantagne account,” said Mr. Parnorsham.

The Drache Girl: Zurfina

Zurfina the Magnificent is a character in the Senta and the Steel Dragon series.  In Book 3: The Drache Girl, as in Book 2: The Dark and Forbidding Land, Zurfina appears, but itsn’t around all that much.  It is, after all, Senta’s story.  When Zurfina is present though, she is really fun.  She is one of my favorite characters because she is so seriously messed up.  She’s self-absorbed to the point of being psychotic.  She’s sexy and wild.  And of course, she’s extremely powerful.  She lives by a few basic guidelines.  If you’re powerful enough, you never need to explain yourself.  If you’re powerful enough you never have to do anything you don’t want to.  Nobody is as important as she is.

Reviews and What to Say

Once you sell enough books to start getting reviews, it can be rough.  I’ve had a lot of really nice things said about my writing, as well as some not so nice.  It’s REALLY hard to respond to a review.  It’s probably good that some forums don’t allow you to respond, but in the past, when I saw a blog review of my book, I would always jot off a note.

I never berated, insulted, or even disagreed with a bad reviewer.  My standard answer was “I’m sorry my book wasn’t more to your liking.”  Why?  Why even respond.  The answer is absolutely no good reason.  It accomplishes nothing.  It’s just so damn hard not to.  But I’m going to try from this point.  I’m going to thank positive reviewers and just ignore negative ones.

I won’t respond to negative reviews.  You can bet your ass I’m still going to read them though.  I’m going to sit and read, cross my arms, stick out my lip, and fume about it.  Can’t help myself.  🙂

A Special Thanks to "Moe the Cat"

A special thanks to “Moe the Cat”, Mobile Read Forum member and frequent poster right here.  Moe has been reading Senta and the Steel Dragon book by book and has uncovered a few too many long undiscovered typos which he has compiled into a list and sent to me.  I really appreciate it Moe.

Update – Kanana the Jungle Girl

I just finished chapter 7 of Kanana the Jungle Girl.  I’ve plotted out a story that is 18 chapters, 49,000 words, but that may change as I go along.  I had a weird dream last night that I think might become a new chapter 12.

I’m having a lot of fun with this story and I hope people enjoy it.  It’s very 1910-1920s pulp, but with quite a few surprises.

The Dark and Forbidding Land – Eamon Shrubb

Eamon Shrubb is one of my favorite characters.  He’s just a big lovable lug.  When I originally plotted out the story, he was only in the second and third parts (which became books 3 & 5).  When I spread it out to five books, I didn’t really have much for Eamon in The Young Sorceress, but I got to write his meeting with Saba in book 2.  I had a great time doing that.

“Colbshallow, right?”
Saba looked up to see a big man standing a few feet from him.  Saba was six foot three and this fellow was just as tall, but with broader shoulders and a thick muscular chest.  Though the man was a few years older than Saba, he was only a private.
“That’s right.”
“I’m Shrubb, Eamon Shrubb.”
“Nice to meet you, Shrubb.”  Saba slowly stood up and stretched out a hand, which Shrubb took.
“What’s your Kafirite name, if you don’t mind my asking?” asked Shrubb.  “Um… you are a Kafirite, aren’t you?”
Saba nodded.
“I’ve never seen so many zeets before.”
“I don’t much care for that word,” said Saba, icily.  He was still thinking about Yuah and was predisposed to dislike anyone whom he thought might be aiming an insult even in her general direction.
“Quite right.  Quite right.  As I say, I’ve never met many zee… Zaeri.  I don’t have anything against them though.  I never understood that whole ‘killed Kafira’ thing anyway.  I mean, didn’t she come back from the dead?  That’s a big part of the church.  How could she have come back from the dead if nobody killed her?  All worked out for the best, as far as I can see.”
“Do you always talk this much?” asked Saba.
“No.”  Shrubb looked pensive.  “Quite uncharacteristic really.”
“Good.  My first name is Saba.  What would you say to some fish and chips?”
“I don’t generally talk to my food.”
“Come on.”

Blogger Trouble

Wow, in their hurry to convert to their new interface (which I hate), blogger has totally screwed up my posting schedule.  Two blog entries that I had scheduled didn’t appear and they budged up my logo and title too.  Let’s hope this doesn’t continue.

The Drache Girl: Yuah Dechantagne

Yuah Dechantagne is a character in Senta and the Steel Dragon Book 3: The Drache Girl.

Spoiler Alert.

Book 3 is the mid-point for Yuah’s story arc.  In many ways, it is for her, the high point in her life.  She has married into a high position in an extremely wealthy family.  What’s more, she actually has a position that puts her above Iolanthe in some ways (because she’s married to Iolanthe’s elder brother, and therefor first female in the family).  This was a fun turn of events for me, because in the first book, Iolanthe is so horrible to her.  On the other hand, Yuah’s low point comes at the end of the book as the only thing she has ever wanted is taken away from her.

Yuah appears only a little in book 4, not because her part isn’t important, but only because book 4 is very Senta-centric.  In some ways her story carries on further than anyone else’s, but you’ll just have to wait for book 5 to see what I mean.

The Drache Girl: The Writers

Books play an important role in Senta and the Steel Dragon, and quite a few fictional authors and their books appear throughout the series. One author mentioned in a previous book actually is a major character in books 4 and 5. ::grin::

Phoebus Dodson is the author of several scientific works that we usually see Hero enjoying or Senta dreading. I imagine his books are huge, with heavy leather bindings, and are usually dusty because nobody wants to read them. His books include: Time and Space, Matter and the Elements, Gravity and Light, and The Contracting Universe.

Dillan Westmacott is the author of a racy novel entitled The Pursuit of Perfection. (Spoiler Alert) This is of course also a reference to the relationship between Terrence, Yuah, and a certain otherworldly winged woman. (End spoiler)

The most often referreed-to author is Kasia Garstone. She is a scandalous muck-raker (and some say socialist or communist. Her books include Steam, Revenge, Sacrifice, and Privilage and Sacrifice. Practically everyone reads her works, but almost nobody admits to it. My favorite line about Garstone actually doesn’t appear until book 5, but I’ll give you a little preview.

“Kasia Garstone says wizards are tools of the oppressors.”

The Two Dragons – Now Available!

After a marathon editing session over the weekend, The Two Dragons is now available at Smashwords https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/152056 or Amazon http://www.amazon.com/dp/B007UJED16 or of course, Amazon Britain https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B007UJED16.

I was making changes on the manuscript right up until the last minute, interesting since the first draft was finished in 2008.  I also had to change the cover.  The orange and red backgrounds had an awful bleed-through on thumbnails.

I am incredibly happy that Senta and the Steel Dragon is now done– happy, relieved, sad, tired, and about 27 other adjectives.  I hope you all enjoy it.